can ypu check?

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After spending several hours collecting information and writing
Do you take a look at essay entitled (it is better for children to grow up in countryside than in a big city)
And correct what you're seeing wrong?
I'm not good in English



It is a well-known fact by everybody that the place where children are brought up is important. Some may see living in the countryside better for children and some may see the opposite. In fact, I see that both sides have advantages, but I feel that living in the city is better because there are more advantages.


The countryside is a small community where people live and know each other where we can let our children play and have fun without worrying about them. The countryside is safer. Farms are also spread in the countryside and our children eat healthy, fresh food,where the environment is less polluted than the city. There are limited places in the countryside, so you know where our children go and you can know who his friends are.
Children living in rural areas where green spaces and outdoors have more opportunities to play, running, jumping and climbing, there a study suggests that rural children better in motor skills.


Growing up in a big city means the children get a better chance to receive excellent education. In a big city there are very sophisticated health services and experienced, qualified doctors because hospitals in a big city are invested more than in the countryside, so living in big cities is more beneficial for children to stay healthy and to lead a better life. Children living in cities are exposed to people from different walks of life and can make friends from different continents and acquire different cultures. In big city, there are many theaters, sports facilities, libraries, museums, and other places where children gather for entertainment and leisure activities.

In conclusion, it is certain that growing up in a big city creates educational opportunities, community services, developed health services and encourages children to interact with other people.

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I will come back sis..

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There is no wrong sis..
Good luck for you..

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Thanks so much

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Thanks so much

Welcome any time sis..

[القلب الجرئ]

I didn't get you do you looking for proofreading ,I noticed few grammar mistakes while I have gone through it.

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I didn't get you do you looking for proofreading ,I noticed few grammar mistakes while I have gone through it.

Where br?

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Example the title it's a question to the reader it should be Said[ Is it .....]. can I ask if it's okay (اليوم الموعود)which year are you in?.

[خندق مسقط]

First of all, I think you need to have a system / methodology / style of writing to follow

I prefer to have the American style of writing because it is easy to follow

You make yourself clear by a sentence of introduction which gives the reader a clear understanding about your topic / subject matter

Then follow that introduction as a thesis statement by 2 or 3 or 4 paragraphs

Then at the end. You put some conclusions or recoomendation as a guideline

Furthermore; you need to check your vocabulary like large city rather than big city

At the end. I would suggest not to translate in your mind from Arabic to English because it is a different style of thinking. I.e. you need to shift your mind by hitting your points directly rather going around that points like we do unfortunately in arabic

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In writing there is no wrong..
Linguistically :There is some mistakes need to be corrected..
I'll review the paragraph again.